Join for FREE | Take the Tour Lost Password?
Shop deviantART for the
holidays and save BIG!
Click here! :holly:
[x]

deviantART

:flirty:
 

Ghost of me by ~nsikhonsou:iconnsikhonsou:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Romantic > Other Romance > Fixed


I can’t sleep
My chest’s heaving
How can I speak?
I’m scared of breathing
I reach you with my fingertips
Brush against the skin
You don’t turn to reach for me
Or even say a thing
I would break myself, my love
Just to be with you
But I can feel you’re slipping
And there’s nothing I can do

You shatter me like glass
Bleeding feeling from the tear
Now I lie here in pieces
Broken up when you’re not there
I would bleed till grey, my love
If I could hold you tight
When you’re not here to comfort me
I know I’m not all right
Now I call out your name
Just to hear the hallowed words
My darling, you’re the ghost of me
And all I know is hurt.
©2007-2009 ~nsikhonsou
:iconnsikhonsou:

Author's Comments

this poem started out as something completely different; i was going for a ballad type poem outlining what a person was prepared to do for their love. it was originally called 'crybaby' and ended like 'but bleed a tear for you/ is something i could never do'. However, i wasn't really happy with the flow of it and so kept hacking away at it until i got it just right. now this poem is more of a reply to 'ghost of you' and i'm pretty pleased with it.

Comments


love 0 0 joy 0 0 wow 0 0 mad 0 0 sad 0 0 fear 0 0 neutral 0 0
:iconkittykittyhunter:
~kittykittyhunter Sep 22, 2007, 9:57:52 PM
I really liked it :D. Since I read your Journal prior to reading this I went through it with a tune in my head, which worked out fine. I like the flow and the imagery is pretty Nice work. :heart:

--
yuujyou wa kokoro no chuugi

~ The heart’s loyalty is friendship.
:iconnsikhonsou:
~nsikhonsou Sep 24, 2007, 6:59:56 AM
thank you :)

--
Oh I wish I was a shinigami with apples in my hair
From Tokyo to USA - they wouldn’t see me there
I was born bright green but my mother didn’t care
Oh I wish I was a shinigami with apples in my hair
:iconkittykittyhunter:
~kittykittyhunter Sep 24, 2007, 7:04:18 AM
No problem :glomp:. By any chance do you play Duel Monsters?

--
yuujyou wa kokoro no chuugi

~ The heart’s loyalty is friendship.
:iconcrazedraven:
~CrazedRaven Sep 24, 2007, 3:05:19 PM
A very good poem I must say; it must suck ass to be abandoned like that

--
You are the light of the world. A city on a hill cannot be hidden. Neither do people light a lamp and put it under a bowl. Instead they put it on its stand, and it gives light to everyone.
:iconnsikhonsou:
~nsikhonsou Sep 24, 2007, 11:18:08 PM
yes and no - i don't play the collectible game, i play the Edo RPG version of the game, which is just as addictive but easier on the purse strings :lol:

--
Oh I wish I was a shinigami with apples in my hair
From Tokyo to USA - they wouldn’t see me there
I was born bright green but my mother didn’t care
Oh I wish I was a shinigami with apples in my hair
:iconnsikhonsou:
~nsikhonsou Sep 24, 2007, 11:19:14 PM
I'm glad you enjoyed the poem, and, yes it really does suck.

--
Oh I wish I was a shinigami with apples in my hair
From Tokyo to USA - they wouldn’t see me there
I was born bright green but my mother didn’t care
Oh I wish I was a shinigami with apples in my hair
:iconkittykittyhunter:
~kittykittyhunter Sep 25, 2007, 9:11:00 AM
:lol: I see your point :XD: Seriously, the amount I've spent on cards... anyway, I'm going to start a club for Duel Monsters, so would you like to join?

--
yuujyou wa kokoro no chuugi

~ The heart’s loyalty is friendship.
Previous PageNext Page

Details

September 17, 2007
923 bytes

Statistics

7
4 [who?]
100 (0 today)
1 (0 today)

Site Map

©2009 deviantART. All rights reserved
About Us | Contact Us | Site Tour | Help & FAQ Advertise | Services Etiquette | Privacy Policy | Terms of Service | Copyright Policy